The final revision : number 6

Because I don't want to drive the readers
feelings, I decided to remove the word
'surprise' from the poem, and revised it
as follows.



(number 6 : revision 2)
After the typhoon

Just after the rain stopped,
Lot's of bicycles rushed out
From the big high-school gate.

A yellow umbrella turned around
With a little girl under it.

The sky regained bright blue.
Strong winds still blew.

Just after the road dried,
Lot's of spots appeared
All around the sidewalk.

A yellow umbrella fell from
The hand of the little girl.

She found many pressed tiny frogs,
Flattened creatures with four legs.

Just after the typhoon went by.
Just after the typhoon went by.

The sky regained bright blue.
Strong winds still blew.

Revision by my family : number 6

There was a comment from my family
who used my account.
I revised the nember 6 as following:



(number 6 : revision 1)
After the typhoon

Just after the rain stopped,
Lot's of bicycles rushed out
From the big high-school gate.

A yellow umbrella turned around
With a little girl under it.

The sky regained bright blue.
Strong winds still blew.

Just after the road dried,
Lot's of spots appeared
All around the sidewalk.

A yellow umbrella fell from
The hand of the little girl.

Surprised to see pressed tiny frogs,
Flattened creatures with four legs.

Just after the typhoon went by.
Just after the typhoon went by.

The sky regained bright blue.
Strong winds still blew.