I showed my poem to a English conversation teacher.
She pointed out some improper use of words.
So I corrected them and I decided
the following was the completion of number 1 for now.
I will post number 2 in a week.
(number 1 revision 2)
Over the Wave
Oh, your heart
Floats on the tide.
May your heart
Lie with the pride,
And have dreams
In snow flakes.
Oh, my heart
left on the shores.
May my heart
Survive the tears,
And dreams vanish
In rain drops.
Oh, our hearts
Become a pair.
May our hearts
Dance in the air,
And have steps
In cherry blossoms.
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